draft of almost first page

Here I have a grey and white and a partially colored (watercolor-- on inappropriate paper) version of the , possible first page or panel of the story about the girl going into the bookstore. The iterations of this drawing litter my desk and floor, and now that I've had time to "sleep on it' I see more things that bother me. The girl's head is too small. Her legs are fatish and oddly shaped. And I don't know if the drawing (divided up into 3 parts) suggests or conveys what I want it to convey. And at this point I'm a little uncertain what that is, too.